[Burning Wheel] Seth Middlebury

[atolnon]

Name: Seth Middlebury
Age: 22
Concept: Wasteland Shaman
Lifepaths: Born Meek, Suicidal, Voice of Stars, Bone Reader
Perception: 5 Will: 6 Agility: 4 Speed: 4 Forte: 5 Power: 3
Health:  Steel:  Reflex:  Mortal Wound:
Resources Left: 6
Weapon: .45  I: 4 M: 7 S: 10 VA: 2

Meek-Wise: Exp 2
.45: Exp 3
Holocaust Seed-wise: Exp 4
Ossopathy: Exp 4
First-Aid: Exp 3
Judas Window: Exp 2
Reality-wise: Exp 3
Distillation: Exp 3

Traits:
Need
Despair
Nausea
Cynic
Answered
Black Humor
Drunk

Instincts:
I'm an Armed Drunk
Run when we're outgunned
I keep my perspective in All This

Beliefs:
Undermine the Seed in a way they can't directly target me.
Alcohol is a Little Death. When I'd end it all, I'll just drink myself into oblivion instead.
I need to show people what it's like Out Here.

Possessions:
.45 (4)
still (8)
Rags and ragged army boots. (1&1)

Contacts/Circles:
I still need to do these.

Note: This is easily the bleakest game I've ever played. This character? Downright healthy, considering the circumstances.

Comments

[brantai.livejournal.com]

Crosspost on Cruel Brittania, pls.

[atolnon.livejournal.com]

I'll put it up there. But it's not finished totally, so I was wondering if you had feedback. I'll just put it there and will change it if I need to.

[brantai.livejournal.com]

Well your Beliefs each need to have an immediate goal associated with them. At least one does, anyway. Your instincts all need to be retooled as Always/Never/If-Then statements. Other than that, the mechanics look solid.

[atolnon.livejournal.com]

I'll tool with them tonight. I always have problems with those.

[brantai.livejournal.com]

You and everyone.

[atolnon.livejournal.com]

=p

Nah, I'm kidding. The issue is primarily with the definitions of the words 'instincts' and 'beliefs' vs. what I'm trying to do with them. With the Instincts, I think you'll note that there's actually an implied 'always' caveat in there, because they're unqualified assertions.

I.E. 'I'm an armed drunk.' basically means that my character is a drunk who's armed. That's a permanent status, but it's not really clear because it's only a technically true reading. It would be clearer if I put, "If I'm drunk, then I'm armed or simply, "I'm always armed." It just isn't as much fun. Similarly, my second Instinct can be read either as "If we're outgunned, run." or "Always run when outgunned."

My middle Belief is the only one that's not really floating. The top one is longer range, but can be read to occur as a once-as. As in, I only need to undermine the Seed once to get it to fly.